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Some people say children no longer need to develop handwriting skills. Others believe that handwriting is still important. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

 

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People invented handwriting in ancient times, providing them with the effective instrument for communications. In the era of computer technologies, X traditional tool has lost its position in the face of new devices. While there are new generations who used to X handwriting, there are still debates between supporters and the opponents of the this instrument. In this essay, I will explore both opinions, followed by my reasoned point of view.

People invented handwriting in ancient times, providing them with an effective instrument for communications. In the era of computer technologies, this traditional tool has lost its position in the face of new devices. While there are new generations who used to use handwriting, there are still debates of this instrument. In this essay, I will explore both sides, and then draw my conclusion.

On the one side x X X  people  who would say about handwriting as an out of date way of texting. Evidently, today's children can grow up without need of penning, using only computers, smartphones or tablets. Moreover, some say that teenagers should spend their time exploring new technologies which may help them in their future. To demonstrate this, they are giving several examples like rotary dial phones which we mostly used to buy, making the skill of using this equipment not important. However, they agree that handwriting can X be applicable in several ways such as calligraphy.

On the one side, there are people who claim handwriting is an out-of-date way of typing. Evidently, today's children can grow up without need of pens, using only computers, smartphones or tablets. Moreover, some say that students should spend their time exploring new technologies which may help them in their future. To demonstrate this, they give several examples, one being rotary dial phones which we don’t own, making the skill of using this equipment obsolete. However, they agree that handwriting can be useful in several ways one being calligraphy without which, design would be flat and simple.

As an alternative opinion, people say that handwriting is still important for children, helping them to develop brain activities. Recent scientific research have discovered a significant increase in X cognitive function of participants who was using handwriting tools. This effect is similar to other motor function's developers such as LEGO, origami and toys. Moreover, some children have aptitude in penning rather than texting using keyboard, enabling them to make lecture notes quickly.

As an alternative opinion, people say that handwriting is still important for children, helping them to develop brain activities. Recent scientific research has discovered a significant increase in the cognitive functions of participants who were using handwriting tools. This effect is similar to other ways to refine motor skills such as LEGO, origami and toys. Moreover, some children have aptitude in writing by hand rather than typing using a keyboard, enabling them to make lecture notes quickly.

In conclusion, both sides are providing logical arguments to support their opinion which is important for children education process. Personally, I believe that children should develop handwriting because it is notably important for their motor skill, memory and, from my experience, sometimes handwritten notes are more useful.

In conclusion, both sides provide logical arguments to support their opinion on which skills are more important for children’s education. Personally, I believe that children should develop handwriting because it is an essential step in developing for their motor skills, memory and, in my experience, sometimes handwritten notes are still a more useful way to memorise content and note things down quickly.

 

Band score

Task ResponseR

7

Be careful to extend your ideas fully -  s are still a more useful way to memorise content and note things down quickly.

Coherence and Cohesion

7

On the one side x X X  people  who would say 

to support their opinion which is important

Lexical Resource

7

Texting 

Typing

 

Obsolete - not needed anymore 

Obscure - not many people know about it

 

Claim = say something is true (maybe it’s not) (good alt for ‘say’)

 

Notably, = oh - read this and write it down - it’s important

 

Students - (good for everyone!)

Pupils (old word - don’t use)

Schoolchildren (good for those under 12)

Grammar Response

6

people  who would say 

s are providing l

research have discovered

participants who was 

 

 

Would Vs Used to 

  • Would feels nostalgic

  • Would is always related to an action never a state

  • Would means multiple times, just like used to

  • Ex. Me and granny would pick mushrooms in the forest

  • Never used in the negative.