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Crime rates tend to be higher in cities than in smaller towns. Explain some possible reasons for this problem and suggest some solutions.

 

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It is true that the level of criminality in recent years has been increasing in highly-populated cities compared to small towns or villages. This essay will analyze some possible reasons for this trend and propose actions to tackle this problem.

It is undeniable/inarguable that the level of criminality in recent years has been rapidly/gradually/steadily increasing in densely-populated cities compared to smaller towns or villages. This essay will analyze some possible reasons for this trend and propose actions to tackle this issue.

Criminals decide to commit this type of offenses in larger cities for several reasons. Firstly, they believe that in those places there are more potential targets to attack. While there is only few shopping centers or banks in low populated areas, in major capitals, the amount of these possible targets is higher, and as a result more room for robbers to commit crime. Secondly, criminals tend to feel “safe” in bigger cities and do not believe they could be caught by the police. Overpopulated cities offer to law-offenders different ways to escape and hide, for example, secret streets and roads that usually are controlled by criminal gangs. In my city, only few years ago, there were some neighborhoods where local authorities were banned to enter because bands of robbers were controlling the zone. In contrast, this type of phenomenon is rare to find in less crowded towns.

Criminals decide to commit this type of offenses in larger cities for several reasons. Firstly, they believe that in these places there are more potential targets. While there are only a few shopping centers or banks in low populated areas, in major capitals the amount of these possible targets is higher and, as a result, there are more opportunities  to commit crime. Secondly, criminals tend to feel “safe” in bigger cities and do not believe they can be caught by the police. Overpopulated cities offer law-offenders different ways to escape and hide. For example, hidden streets that usually are controlled by criminal gangs. In my city, only a few years ago, there were some neighborhoods where local authorities were banned from entering as bands of robbers were controlling the zone. In contrast, this type of phenomenon is rare to find in less crowded towns.

To tackle this problem, local authorities can implement a number of strategies. In my experience, a local group of people to supervise their community has result in a safer environment for the neighborhood. During night, there are patrols composed of five to ten citizens searching for suspicious behavior and assisting the police to maintain the safety of the community. Another possible approach is to increase the level of punishment for offenders and force them to pay for their crimes X helping the community accordingly with the level of the offence.

To tackle this problem, local authorities can implement a number of strategies. In my experience, a local group of people supervising their community has resulted in a safer environment for the neighborhood. During the night, there are patrols composed of five to ten citizens searching for suspicious behavior and assisting the police to maintain the safety of the community. Another possible approach is to increase the level of punishment for offenders and force them to pay for their crimes by helping the community according to/in line with the level of the offence.

In conclusion, although there are different reasons for higher level of crimes in large cities such as more potential targets to attack and different places to hide for law-offenders, alternative solutions for lowering this trend can be implemented either by citizens themselves or with harder authorities’ regulations.

In conclusion, although there are different reasons for the higher crime rates in large cities such as more potential targets and different places to hide, alternative solutions for reducing/bringing down this trend can be implemented either by citizens themselves or with stricter regulations from authorities.

 

Band score

Task

ResponseR

7

No more than three consecutive words in a row from the question

Coherence

and

Cohesion

6

For example - start a new sentence 

For instance = same as for example but a little more sophisticated.

To illustrate this,

Lexical

Resource

7

Problem > Issue 

Add adverbs/adjectives to verbs + nouns to more accurately describe the situation you are writing about.

 

banned/forbidden/stopped/prevented/blocked FROM something


Larger is a better alternative to bigger

Grammar

Response

6

Few = not many

A few = several 

Few people understand the difference between few and a few


Use could for future possibility and can for general real existing possibility