Delicious grammar for Task 1

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You cannot go to a company where you got an offer. Write a letter to the HR supervisor to:
  • Express your gratitude;
  • Explain the reason why you decline the offer;
  • Explain why you like your current job very much.

 

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Dear Linda, 

 

First of all, i would like to express my  gratitude for the generous offer from your company for the Marketing Specialist role. 

Dear Linda, 

 

Firstly, i would like to express my  gratitude for the generous offer from your company to take (on) the Marketing Specialist role.

Although the BBB is a truly amasing company to work for wich holds the leading market positions for several years in row, i regertfully have to turn this offer down. The reason is the fact that i currently have a Lead Marketing Specialist position in AAA and moving to the proposed role would be a step back for me.   

Although the BBB is a truly amazing company to work for given that it has held a leading market position for several years in a row, I regretfully have to turn this offer down. The reason is that i currently have a Lead Marketing Specialist position in AAA and moving to the proposed role would be a step back for me.   

I truly enjoy the challanges i meet in my corrent role in a daily basis as as well as the level of appreciation my manager gives to me and my team.

I (very much) enjoy the challenges i face/encounter/come up against in my current role on a daily basis as well as the level of appreciation my manager gives to me and my team.

I hope you will find a suitable candidate to fill the open position. 

 

Kind regards, Anna

I hope you will find a suitable candidate to fill the position. 

 

Regards, Anna

 

Band score

Task ResponseR

7

don’t use meaningless words. everything  must add value (first of all,)

The reason is the fact that 

suitable candidate to fill the open position

Coherence and Cohesion

6

Passable.

Lexical Resource

6

Passable.

Grammar Response

7

For several years + present perfect 

When you use time expressions which connect the past and now, use present perfect. 

They should be like alarms ringing in your head:

USEPRESENTPERFECTUSEPRESENTPERFECTUSEPRESENTPERFECTUSEPRESENT

Here are some of the most typical time expressions:

For 10 years 

For 2 weeks 

For ages

For as long as I can remember 

For the last 5 minutes 

For the last hour 

In recent times, 

In recent years,

Recently, 

Lately, 

Since last week 

Since my childhood 

Since I was a kid 

Since then, 

Since that point, 

Since that time,

Since a few years back,