Delicious grammar for Task 1

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You cannot go to a company where you got an offer. Write a letter to the HR supervisor to:
  • Express your gratitude;
  • Explain the reason why you decline the offer;
  • Explain why you like your current job very much.

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Dear Linda,​​ 

 

First​​ of all,​​ i would like to express my  gratitude for the generous offer​​ from your company​​ for​​ the Marketing Specialist role.​​ 

Dear Linda,​​ 

 

Firstly, i would like to express my  gratitude for the generous offer from your company to take (on) the Marketing Specialist role.

Although the BBB is a truly​​ amasing​​ company to work for​​ wich​​ holds the leading market positions​​ for several years in row, i​​ regertfully​​ have to turn this offer down.​​ The reason is the fact​​ that i currently have a Lead Marketing Specialist position in AAA and moving to the proposed role would be a step​​ back​​ for me.   

Although the BBB is a truly​​ amazing​​ company to work for given that it​​ has held a leading market position for several years in a row, I​​ regretfully​​ have to turn this offer down.​​ The reason is​​ that i currently have a Lead Marketing Specialist position in AAA and moving to the proposed role would be a step​​ back for me.   

I​​ truly​​ enjoy the​​ challanges​​ i​​ meet​​ in my​​ corrent​​ role​​ in​​ a daily​​ basis as​​ as well as the level of appreciation my manager gives to me and my team.

I (very much)​​ enjoy the​​ challenges​​ i​​ face/encounter/come up against​​ in my​​ current​​ role​​ on a daily basis​​ as well as the level of appreciation my manager gives to me and my team.

I hope you will find a suitable candidate to fill the open position.​​ 

 

Kind regards, Anna

I hope you will find a suitable candidate to fill the position.​​ 

 

Regards, Anna

 

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Task​​ ResponseR

7

don’t use meaningless words. everything  must add value (first of all,)

The reason is​​ the fact​​ that​​ 

suitable candidate to fill the​​ open​​ position

Coherence and​​ Cohesion

6

Passable.

Lexical​​ Resource

6

Passable.

Grammar​​ Response

7

For several years + present perfect​​ 

When you use time expressions which connect the past and now, use present perfect.​​ 

They should be like alarms ringing in your head:

USEPRESENTPERFECTUSEPRESENTPERFECTUSEPRESENTPERFECTUSEPRESENT

Here are some of the most typical time expressions:

For 10 years​​ 

For 2 weeks​​ 

For ages

For as long as I can remember​​ 

For the last 5 minutes​​ 

For the last hour​​ 

In recent times,​​ 

In recent years,

Recently,​​ 

Lately,​​ 

Since last week​​ 

Since my childhood​​ 

Since I was a kid​​ 

Since then,​​ 

Since that point,​​ 

Since that time,

Since a few years back,