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More and more qualified people are moving countries for work. Some people believe that migrants are stealing jobs from native people. Others feel that this is only part of the natural movement of workers around the world.
To what extent do you agree or disagree. Give examples from your own experience to support your ideas.

 

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More and more people  changed their workplace, going from poor developing countries to places with wealthy economy, especially workers with high-demanded specialties such as engineering, coding, and medicine. While some people would argue that this is a negative trend due to x unfairness of the brain leaking which can cause a negative effect on their countries, the others suppose that this is a modern trend which is typical for the current age. This essay will explore both advantages and disadvantages before drawing my opinion.

There is a growing number of people who have changed their workplace, shifting from poor, developing countries to places with healthy economies, especially workers with specialties such as engineering, coding, and medicine which are in high demand. While some people would argue that this is a negative trend due to the inherent unfairness of the brain drain which can cause a negative effect on their countries, the others consider that this is a trend which is indicative/symptomatic of the modern age. This essay will explore both advantages and disadvantages before drawing an conclusion.

Firstly, it is obvious that people tend to get better remuneration as well as work conditions which can be usually offered by rich countries. This shift takes away best qualified specialists, thus there is a fall in a number of future leaders in science, politics or business. For instance, in Russian 90s, there was a enormous outflow of talented people due to economical issues and unemployment , as it can be evidenced, today they are well-known CEOs like Sergey Brin or Nobel prize winners like Andrew Game. Moreover, the government spent a significant amount of money to provide them with a competitive education, supposing that they would work for the country. All of these points gives enough arguments to skeptics of this phenomenon.

Firstly, it is obvious that rich countries have the potential to offer better remuneration as well as work conditions. This shift takes away the best qualified specialists, thus there is a fall in a number of future leaders in science, politics or business. For instance, in 90s Russia, there was a enormous outflow of talented people due to economic issues and unemployment, as seen with well-known CEOs today like Sergey Brin or Nobel prize winners like Andrew Game. Moreover, the Russian government spent a significant amount of money to provide them with a competitive education, in the belief that they would work for the country. All of these points provide sufficient arguments to skeptics of this phenomenon.

On the other hand, these movements are parts of the globalisation process, making x impact on the common purposes for the global community. There have been tremendous changes since x prior century such as technological processes shift, transportation has become affordable and the majority of people has learnt a second language. Given that, although brains are leaking out of a country, some of them returns back to x homeland being ready to introduce obtained skills and experience there in following. Overall, this trend has a positive effect on the global economy as well as the local one.

On the other hand, these movements are part of the globalisation process, making an impact on the common goal for the global community. There have been tremendous changes since the prior century such as the seismic shift in technological processes, transportation has become affordable and the majority of people have learnt a second language. Given these, although brains are leaking out of countries, some of them return to the homeland ready to introduce obtained skills and experience in turn. Overall, this trend has a positive effect on the global economy as well as the national/domestic one.

In summary, the work immigration is a typical trend for this era, providing new opportunities to the global economy. However, as soon as there is the brain leaking phenomenon, there will be people who are against this. Personally, I believe that there is a right to work granted by the UN which also cooperates people together, thus this is a right solution for global calls. Possibly, governments should attract these specialists back, ???? offering them some incentives in x future.

In summary, worker migration has become the norm in our world, providing new opportunities to the global economy. However, as long as there is the brain drain phenomenon, there will be people who are against this. Personally, I believe that the right to work, granted by the UN, allows people to cooperate, thus this is the right solution for managing global issues. Possibly, governments should attract these specialists back, by offering them some incentives in the future.

 

Band score

Task ResponseR

7

 

Coherence and Cohesion

7

Be careful with given that - it can go both ways 

Given that you don’t know, i will tell you. >>>>>>>

He didn’t know. Given that, I told him. <<<<<<< (wow - commas are important)

As long as - get this right and you’re better than 70% of russian english speakers. 


When explaining how, don’t just use a comma and think that everything is going to be ok - it’s not. Use by doing something. Or with something. Through the process of doing something.

Lexical Resource

7

Suppose - it means guess. Don’t use it when you mean think about for a long time - use consider


Enough is nice - sufficient is nicer. 

Grammar Response

6

Verb agreement x 4 

Present perfect x 1 

Articles x 6 (be careful with superlatives - the best, the right)