Adverbs and Adjectives: Speak softly and carry a big stick

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Computers have made it possible for office workers to do much of their work from home instead of working in offices every day. Working from home should be encouraged as it is good for workers and employers. Do you agree or disagree?

 

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In today’s world, some argue working at home has become more conveniently and advantageously, while other claim that it will be followed with hidden downsides. Personally, I agree that freelancers, professionals who work from their homes, will x x xopen a door to new opportunities in any industry. In this essay, I will explore both sides of the argument before reaching a conclusion. 

 

In today’s world, some argue working at home has become more convenient and advantageous, while others claim that it will bring/lead to/result in hidden downsides. Personally, I agree that freelancers, professionals who work from their homes, will be able to open a door to new opportunities in any industry. In this essay, I will explore both sides of the argument before reaching a conclusion.

The clearest advantage to having a workplace at home is that it enables employees to avoid a stressful trip to their office. Additionally, it is inarguable that engineers might choose interesting projects by themselves and been involved in several pieces of work over the world.

It is also often argued that employers can pay less for renting offices while using freelancers from other countries. In closing,  cooperating with outsourcing resources, hiring professionals from different parts of the world is not an issue in comparison to searching qualified staff in limited area x as a city.

 

The clearest advantage to having a workplace at home is that it enables employees to avoid a stressful trip to their office. Additionally, we can definitely say without question that specialists might choose interesting projects by themselves and be involved in several of these all over the world. 

It is also often argued that employers can pay less for renting offices by using freelancers from other countries. In closing, cooperating with outsourcing resources, hiring professionals from different parts of the world is not an issue in comparison to searching for qualified staff in limited area such as a city.

Having sad that these arguments give a strong argument for working from home. On the other hand, if freelancers finish the current (ongoing) job, they may waste a significant amount of time searching x x next client or employer and this could be a serious issue if you have a lack of experience. Another negative aspect for companies' managers could be that persons working at home may disappear. This means that companies should be careful of failing a project deadline, otherwise they should keep a short list of expert for urgent replacing.

Having said that, these arguments build a strong case for working from home. On the other hand, if freelancers finish the ongoing job, they may waste a significant amount of time searching for their next client or employer and this could be a serious issue if they have a lack of experience. Another negative aspect for companies' managers could be that persons working at home may be untrustworthy/unreliable/irresponsible. This means that companies should be careful of failing to meet a project deadline or, alternatively, they should keep a shortlist of experts for urgent replacements.

In my view, if working at home can be considered as a new and effective type of company organisation, then it will move forward companies and give huge potential.

In my view, if working at home can be considered as a new and effective method of structuring a company, then it will move them forward and unlock huge potential.

 

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Task ResponseR

7

 

Coherence and Cohesion

6

When you talk about people using other - use others

Lexical Resource

6

Or, alternatively, do something

Grammar Response

6

When you use : 

  • Be 

  • Become

  • Get 

  • Make someone/something adjective

  • Perception verbs (look/sound/feel/taste/seem/appear)

We have to use adjectives!!!

 

Search + for 

Look + for 

 

For example - use at the beginning of a sentence

For instance - use at the beginning of a sentence

Such as - use it in the middle or at the end of a sentence. 

 

Be careful to follow verb forms (might choose and be)